My family education

A candidate in Hunan

Once upon a time, a man kept an eagle. Later, the eagle ran away. A few days later, the eagle's body was found on the mountain. Master can't figure out why the eagle died for no reason. Under the guidance of the old man, he cut open the eagle's stomach and suddenly realized.

It turned out that the eagle was pampered in a cage, but it lost its hunting ability, its stomach was empty and it starved to death.

Children are a flock of eagles, and eventually they will leave the cage. Every parent, every family, is only a temporary haven. A ship that wants to go to sea will eventually go to sea, and the wind and waves it will experience are inevitable after all. There are many roads and dark nights in life, which can only be faced alone. Parents can't replace and undertake their children's lives.

However, if you look at China today, where is there no "eagle" in a cage? They have never experienced it, and have been living cautiously under the care of their parents. When you go to school, your parents will pick you up and help you carry your schoolbag. In life, parents help to wash quilts, help to dress and tie shoelaces; Even when going to summer camp, parents have prepared enough food and bags big enough to hold dirty clothes. ......

Imagine, how can such a group of "young eagles" who fly out of the cage survive? What can they do except feel the troubles and heaviness of life? Tsinghua University once expelled a student because he didn't know how to dress and tie his shoelaces at school. It is also reported that a girl didn't know how to cook eggs at school, so she had to go home crying with two eggs in her arms. Isn't it strange that such a ridiculous thing is still alive in real life? Not surprising! Such education will lead to such children.

Sugarcane watered without sugarcane juice is sweet. Children's growth needs sharpening, and children's ability can only be formed through sharpening. Makarenko once hit the nail on the head: "Overindulgence is a kind of destruction to children." This is not sensational.

Have you ever seen a lonely pine tree standing proudly on a cliff? Why does its stem not move in the cold wind? That's because when it leaned out of the boulder, it was already devastated by suffering.

Have you ever seen butterflies flying around? Why are its wings so powerful in the sun? That's because when it comes out of the cocoon, it tries its best to squeeze body fluids into its wings.

"The blade comes from sharpening, and the plum blossom is bitter and cold." "If the white jade is not destroyed, what is it?" Although the ancients have gone far away, the words are still in my ears!

Some people say that the future of the country is in the hands of mothers rather than those in power. Family education is related to the fate of the country. I hope that parents in the world will let their children fly in cages, let their children experience storms and let their children build strong wings!

Comments: This article begins with the fact that the eagle starved to death in a cage because of its loss of foraging ability, which leads to family education problems, which is natural and cordial. This paper gives people a feeling that "parents can't replace and undertake children's lives" from the phenomena existing in natural creatures, and then expounds the necessity of "letting go of children" from many angles in view of the lack of self-reliance education in real life. All the "contents" are in the first category, with 25 points.

The article is well organized, echoing from beginning to end and ending in one go. "Rigorous structure"; The clever language, accurate words and rich materials show the author's quite good Chinese literacy and beautiful fonts. "Expression" is in the first class. Get 25 points.

The development level is 10 in terms of "richness" and "literary talent".

Step 2 offer sacrifices to your younger brother

A candidate in Hunan

My uncle's son, Eddie, was born in 1989 and died at the age of ten. Alas, cousin! If you can tell the difference between inside and mouth, why not hate your father and brother because of your age? You are pure, why don't you leave your uncle's house?

My uncle is harsh, although he has no talent, but I hope you can study and have high hopes for you, but you died young, why should you follow your father's wishes! I tried to teach you to read, and I learned about Sima Guang's smashing cans to save people. I said, "Sima Guang has a trip as an expert, and he has a unique care. So I can be famous in the future. Shang Jun has a saying,' Doubt is nothing, doubt is futile', so he must make a decisive decision and be suspicious. " You ask doubtfully, "It is wise to smash the jar, but the jar is thick and the water is muddy and deep.". Throwing pebbles won't damage the cylinder, throwing boulders will also hurt people, and the cylinder skin will fall off and be as sharp as a knife, which is not the best policy. " I am speechless. Your father pointed at you and cursed: "This child is hopeless! Is there anything unnatural about the sages in the book? Only study, don't talk about others! " Oh! These six years are about to pass, and the "innovation" of the lead singer in the education sector is in the ascendant. With your unique insights, you were killed by the old man, pathetic husband!

You like insects, fish, birds and animals, mountains and rivers, flowers and trees. Always care and pour out your true feelings. You cut a few impatiens in the corner, build your own fence, draw water from the canal and catch insects to enrich the soil. When the flowers bloom, although there is no fragrance, it is enough for extreme visual entertainment. Your father destroyed it. Pointing at you and scolding: "Idiot! Why can't you study but you can't get married when you grow up? " You ran away in anger and came back with a few silkworm leaves. Your dad grabbed it and tore it up, saying, "The black sheep hurt my heart! Why don't you refute it? Where do you grow silkworms and flowers? " Oh! Your father's stubbornness, why not let a son who loves you? Giving love will naturally be very humane. Why do you see it? What is the "quality+individuality, standardization+innovation" advocated by education today?

There is a saying in Kong Qiu: "Only those who wear talents enter, those who gather rot and the king retreats." Silly brother, we can't support each other in life, and we can't caress you in sorrow. You died of depression and your father's harshness. Oh! China people's family education is so, why does the Chinese nation stand tall in the world? Shang Jun said: "Virtue is not secular, and those who achieve great things do not feel the public." So with different sons, others regard it as absurd, but without understanding and tolerance, how can education flourish?

The death of my beloved brother is painful for my silly brother, but there are also thousands of sons in Qian Qian. How can we overcome his sadness? Let's say: make the best use of the situation, choose good and follow. This is the responsibility of educators.

Alas, my brother is at peace.

Comment: A ten-year-old child likes reverse thinking and innovation. Good at planting flowers and raising silkworms, loving nature; However, they did not get the understanding and support of their families, and even "died of depression" or "killed by the elderly". Taking negative examples, the article is intended to sound the alarm for "family education": children's "innovation" ability must not be stifled, and the development of "personality" and the cultivation of "quality" must not be in vain. The description of the two cases is concrete and vivid, and the narrative is lyrical; The whole text is full of sound and emotion, sad and moving.

This article is depressing to read. The narrative of "dying of depression" is purely for the needs of composition, which is exaggerated; The emotional tone of the whole article is not in harmony with youth. But as far as composition is concerned, we can't help but affirm the examinee's daily accumulation of literature and history, especially his efforts in reading and imitating China's ancient masterpieces (such as Han Yu's "Sacrificing a Nephew" and Yuan Mei's "Sacrificing a Sister"). Not to mention the maturity of diction and sentences, and the appropriateness of quotations in ancient books, it is impossible to just look at the free writing on the spot-structuring chapters, organizing words, creating atmosphere and mobilizing organizations, and not paying attention to scholars all the time. Although we don't encourage middle school students to write in classical Chinese, interest is allowed. One of the "exercises" at the end of Han Yu's "Sacrificing Twelve Lang Wen" selected in the Chinese textbook for senior high school is: "Write a short essay to remember your familiar deceased relatives and friends". We might as well regard this candidate's eulogy for "deceased relatives and friends" as an "exercise" that meets the teaching requirements. The content of the article is 25 points, the expression is 25 points, and the development level is 10. Total score: 25+25+ 10=60 points.

If you love me, don't hold me too tightly.

A candidate in Hunan

Butterfly wing

I spin in the dark and talk among the flowers, just waiting for that beautiful dream to bloom in the sun.

The ancestors left a thousand years of hope: to inherit the spirit of beauty, and before the integration of beauty and the world, we breathed restlessness and persistence in the dark. The carrier of darkness is the cocoon woven by the creator with failure, pain and confusion.

No one wants to break away from the pale shackles and fly to the blue sky? Who doesn't want to dance along a stream to arouse the feelings of returning to the girl? Who doesn't want to linger in the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River? Who wouldn't? ......

And we know that fragile wings can't stand the wind and rain, and only a resolute and persistent body cast in loneliness, cold and darkness can make me feel free and beautiful.

Don't cut my cocoon with your scissors in good faith, help me wave away the suffering in my life, please don't! Let me smell the flowers prematurely, which is not really my concern, but a kind of destruction-I will shrink in the sun, become dead leaves and melt in the soil. ......

Love me and let me face my own suffering.

Tears of fish

I yearn for the clear spring on the horizon, where my brave dream is tied; I am eager to blend into the vast ocean and turn my heart into blue; I want to swim quietly in the clear lake without a trace of dust on my body. .....

With my head held high, the indomitable edges and corners in my eyes were broken, and I struggled to rush. A gorgeous glass cover makes people feel a little gloomy and ferocious. Hold me and it hurts.

So I closed my eyes and let my scales float feebly.

The sunset is like blood, and I see everything around me in a mess, my dreams, my heart and my tears.

Perhaps, the world in this glass cage is safe and warm, and there will be no storm. There will be no lightning, but as far as life is concerned, is it a scenery or a cage?

If you love me, don't hold me too tightly.

other

The tide of years is surging, bleaching the blood of history and the fragility of human nature into eternity. In this eternity, there are too many confusions and obsessions, wisdom and Qingyuan.

How to make this "forever" crystal clear? How can butterflies breathe fragrance lightly, and how can fish interpret life freely? Listen-

Let every life experience the suffering it deserves, and let every soul become perfect in constant deformity-caring, sometimes it is actually a kind of goodwill destruction.

Comments: This article is cleverly conceived. The article is divided into three parts: butterfly wings, fish tears, and other three parts. The first part is metaphor, and the third part is conclusion. Well-proportioned structure and sincere feelings. It expresses the center of "love me, don't hold it too tightly" in the tone of "butterfly" and "fish", which coincides with the topic of family education and makes people feel kind and natural to read. The language of the article is concise, showing no.

4. Pipa Star's parents are affectionate

A candidate in Hunan

[... she turned the tuning pin and tested several strings, and we could feel her feelings even before she played]

Children are the crystallization of parents' love and the node from love to affection. Therefore, my parents regard me as an angel from God. In my mother's abdomen, I began the first lesson of family education. Listening to light music and doing aerobics are all my compulsory courses. I grew up happily in a warm and friendly environment.

Big strings hum like rain, and small strings whisper like secrets. Talking noisily is like pouring pearls, big and small, into a plate of jade]

Love your daughter and become a phoenix. Strict father's loving mother is two complementary roles in my childhood. My father scolded me severely. When teaching me, there is always my mother's gentle voice to comfort me. This is success. In my childhood, everything I learned was solid and solid, because of my father's contribution. I'm kind-hearted, but I'm not a sissy. I love it. Don't be a flower in a greenhouse, and don't degenerate and be negative.

[Between Guan Yingying's words, the bottom of the flower slips]

After school, my parents relaxed a little and stopped restricting my activities all day. In order to relieve the pressure of study, parents at the weekend likes to take me for an outing in the suburbs. Those days have been imprinted in my mind, because they are beautiful and will not be repeated. Remember, flowers are always in bloom, grass is always green, the wind is always warm, and birds are always happy, just like my mood.

[The ice spring is cold and astringent, and the strings are frozen. The condensed water will never pass, and it will turn into deep sadness and hidden lament, and it will be told silently, more than with sound]

When the rebellious god came, I was not smart enough to please my parents. I always feel that I have grown up and no longer need platitudes and nagging. I like strange clothes and talk back, and the atmosphere at home is somewhat dignified. In retrospect, I seem to have gone the wrong way. Thanks to my father, that stern face suddenly turned into kindness and patience. He guided me step by step, never exposing my shortcomings, nor repeating the sermon, so the dark days passed silently.

Pay attention to your strokes at the end of the song. All four strings make a sound, just like tearing silk.

Finally raised me. I have some tragic feelings when I leave my parents. When my parents are old, I find the white silk on their temples; My parents laughed, and when I found their satisfied and gratified eyes, I suddenly cried. Parents' love, parents' words and deeds have long been engraved in my heart. Finally, the father said, "Son, I can only go by myself in the future. Grasp it yourself! "

[But who among them cried the most? The eyes are wet]

I want to thank my parents for their teaching. They are the most ordinary parents, but they are the stars I will always admire. They light the way forward for me and guide me to a bright future.

Comments: The biggest feature of this article is undoubtedly the innovation in writing. The ingenious conception shows the examinee's ability to master the genre. In this paper, the ancient masterpiece Pipa Xing is used as a symbol to write structural transformation, and at the same time, it organically combines the growth process of candidates. The article is scattered and collected, with clear thinking and accurate language. At the same time, this article also pays attention to details and "emotion". My parents laughed when I found their eyes satisfied with relief ... "

5. A letter to Meng Mu.

A candidate in Hunan

Dear Meng Mu:

I am the mother of 2 1 century, and I have a naughty son who fails to live up to expectations. Two days ago, my son's head teacher called me and asked me to discipline him well and let him not get into trouble again! I asked what was going on. Guess what the child said? He even said that he wanted to be a knowledgeable and moral person like your son Monk, and always respect the old and love the young-God, no wonder the head teacher asked me to teach him a lesson! Can a straightforward and a little silly person like your son survive in today's world of flowers and flowers? Meng Mu, Meng Mu! You really hurt me. Why did you teach your son like that? What a mistake.

First of all, you shouldn't move to Meng Mu. Sister, do you know how high the house price is in 2 1 century? If we move to three families, we won't go bankrupt and my family will be poor. Tell you, the surrounding environment is not good, it is not good. Why should the child's family be so worried about him? Like my family, the one across the hall is an expert in "building the Great Wall"; On the left is a fortune teller who swindles money; The family on the right is engaged in making and selling fakes ... Although this environment is not elegant enough, it is enough for our son to learn all the skills-flattery, deception, deception ... It is really difficult for people without these two skills to stand on their feet in this world! But what about you? Move out of a businessman's house! Please. If your son Mencius had learned the businessman's duplicity and duplicity, he would have made a fortune long ago. How can I be so hungry that I have to say "sacrifice my life for justice" all day? Is it sour?

Secondly, even if you move, you can't move next to a group of nerds. As the saying goes, "Nothing goes to the Three Treasures Hall." Aren't you doing this on purpose to make your son a loser? Like our kiddo, she calculated that her son was going to be an official, so she moved to the house next to that building in Gao Qian, wondering how to change a good girl all day and let her son climb the dragon and attach the phoenix. Won't he be promoted soon one day? Nowadays, there are many nepotism. Do you have any knowledge? There are all "saints".

Third, you're dead. Why did you cut your loom? That's cotton satin woven with great effort-how expensive it is! Why destroy it to educate your truant son? What a waste! Nowadays, children want to go to school, but their parents are still too distressed to let them go! It's much better to go into the sea early and do some rich business than to be a great scholar who runs into a wall everywhere? In fact, your son is very smart and knows that he is going to skip class. I don't have the heart to push him into the fire pit by such despicable means as broken wires.

In a word, you, you are a stupid mother. You can't make a fortune and get promoted by teaching your son to be a great scholar. Well, of course I don't want my son to be so unworthy! I want him to be an outstanding figure in the new century!

Future mother

Any day

Comment: This article is self-critical, ironic and spicy. In the form of letters, the author vividly describes some incorrect family education concepts at present. This paper comments on the educational behavior of "Three Movements" in Meng Mu, which is in sharp contrast with modern family education. The ending is thought-provoking and makes the article have the spirit of the times. The writing style is sharp and humorous, and the psychological analysis is in place, which brings the characteristics of topic composition to the extreme.

6. Recall the lost years.

A candidate in Hunan

In a season of spring breeze and catkins flying all over the sky, a weak boy was born. Under the gaze of a pair of loving eyes, she began to thrive. With this, she began to look at this strange world with curious eyes. She began to study, and under the careful guidance of her family, she began to experience a learning process from simple to in-depth, from knowing little to knowing much. There is joy, pain, tears and laughter. How many years have passed and there is endless love!

Joy came in an instant, sitting in the cradle, looking at the whispering swallow, so grandpa taught her to recite "helpless flowers fall, like ripe swallows return." Oh, Song Ci can fly; Lying on the big round table in front of the window, pointing to the lotus reflected in the sun, grandpa shook his head and read "Lotus can be picked in the south of the Yangtze River, and Hetian brings lotus leaves". Oh, the ancient Yuefu is colorful and smells faint; On a dark rainy night, with the story of the prince and Cinderella and her body temperature, she crossed the Nile and the Danish Strait in her dream and played games with Grandpa Andersen with a white beard. In the bright spring breeze, sitting on the grass like Beth, lying under the wet green branches of Qin Sang, listening to grandpa's story of the Three Kingdoms, she really wants to ride a red hare and meet the majestic Guan Yunchang. These bits and pieces of joy made her interested in her future life and gained endless knowledge.

The pain left an indelible impression. When she caught the chicken and gave a smug laugh, when she had a whim to cut flowers and clothes, when she put down her pen and slipped out to make a snow doll, when she was put in a dark room for disobedience, she rudely accepted a firm "lesson." So she felt wronged, sadder than that Qu Yuan, and shed tears eastward than that Southern Tang Queen. She got a warm and reasonable explanation, learned not to bully the weak, learned the hard-won needle and thread, learned persistence and patience, learned the basic principles of being a man, and gained strength that could not be drawn from schools and books.

Tears and laughter enriched her plain life. Encouraged by her father, she climbed the Great Wall, Mount Tai, Yueyang Tower and the sea viewing platform. In the whirlpool of laughter and tears, he learned to have a majestic waist like a mountain and a broad mind like the sea. Every time she shed tears, she snuggled up to her family. This is the quietest haven. Every time she laughs, she shares it with the whole family. This is the most beautiful Shangri-La in her heart.

There is joy, pain, tears and laughter. This is her fleeting time.

Time flies like water, time flies like water, but what never dies is that beautiful and meaningful happy time!

Comments: Content: Closely related to the topic, the vivid description contains the education of my grandparents and my daily behavior. This kind of education made my lost years a "meaningful happy time", with a full score of 25.

Expression: The article is well-structured and meets the stylistic requirements, but there are two language errors, and the score is 24 points.

The development score 10 comes from "novel ideas" and "unique imagination".

There are three typos, 1 button. Total: 25+24+ 10- 1=58.

Experts lead the way. The topic of this year's Hunan college entrance examination composition is "family education". Most candidates have something to say about this topic, but judging from their scores, their scores are not ideal. There are many reasons for this situation, one of which is that the questions are not carefully examined. For example, many candidates play the sideline, or write about family's "love" and affection without involving "education", or talk about "education" and stay away from "family", or ignore guidance and write about foreign education. Some candidates even wrote poems.

If you want to get high marks in college entrance examination composition, you should pay full attention to the following five points: first, it is easy to get high marks in writing prose; Second, making up stories or making up new stories is more polished; Third, titles play a very important role; Fourth, language should reflect a kind of sophistication; Fifth, the content should be profound and the form should be vivid.