The teaching design of composition teaching plan "How to make the language of composition beautiful"

Composition has always been the highlight of Chinese learning. However, many students often talk about "writing". A composition has worked hard enough words, but it makes people feel like boiled water-tasteless. The sage Confucius put it well: "Words without deeds are not far away." Without beautiful language packaging, no matter how profound thoughts and rich content, it will appear silent and pale. As a result, after each exam, many students can only look at the "score" and sigh: it is not easy to say I love you, composition! So, how can we make the composition look good? This is the question we are going to discuss today.

Second, clear learning objectives.

Knowledge and ability: correctly understand and use the language of the motherland, make the language attractive and improve the composition language.

Methods and processes: Careful deliberation, guiding taste and comparative identification.

Values and feelings: love the language of the motherland, love the bright language.

Third, enjoy the fragment of Princess Zhu Huan.

(1) Wei Zi's analysis: poetic language, gentle temperament, melancholy heart and quick thinking.

(2) Swallow analysis: I want to express myself, but I lack culture. I am naive, reckless and outspoken.

(3) There is a buddy in the village who is so stupid that he always says something unpleasant and unlucky. Moreover, it is often on occasions when people in the village hold weddings, have children and hold a full moon, which makes everyone afraid of him coming. Once, a villager held a full moon for his children, and everyone came to celebrate and hold a wedding reception. This guy is here, too. The host was afraid that he would talk nonsense again, so he quickly served him food, offered cigarettes and toasted, and everyone became nervous. The result is not bad. After eating and drinking, the buddy left happily without saying a word from beginning to end. Everyone is relieved!

Unexpectedly, he came back with a twisted face. The master hurried forward and asked him, "What's the matter?" ? He looked at everyone and said to his host, "As a witness, I didn't say anything this time. Don't blame me if your child dies in the future! " The master fainted.

(4), life inspiration:

1, life is not a lack of beauty, but a lack of eyes to find beauty and ideas to create beauty.

2. Beautiful language is the embodiment of talent.

(4) Language beauty skills

Wine always takes a long time to have a unique aroma, and the language of composition has to be tempered repeatedly to have endless charm. The ancients said, "If you look at a thousand swords, you will know their weapons; if you play a thousand songs, you will know their sounds." Let's look for the golden key to temper language by tasting famous sentences.

(1) Choose vivid characters reasonably

(2) Clever use of various rhetorical devices

(3) Show talent in humor.

One of the skills: (1) Choose vivid characters reasonably.

Good at using expressive words such as verbs and adjectives with decorative effects and four-character words with visual impact.

Example: (1) A few days ago, I got a dozen pimples on my face. I didn't care, but the longer I thought about it, the more I felt.

(2) A few days ago, I had only a few pimples on my face and more than a dozen came out. I don't care. I thought these hills would disappear soon, but the longer I thought about it, the more I felt.

(3) A few days ago, I had only a few pimples on my face and more than a dozen came out. I didn't care, thinking that these hills would disappear soon. Unexpectedly, these little guys persevered and went forward, and in just a few days, they got all over my face.

2. Emotional contrast: fill in the words

Oh, my God! I'm gonna be late. I got out of bed in a hurry, put on clothes and shoes, brushed my teeth, washed my face and went to school.

(2) Practical exercise: Describe the scene in the middle of the night.

Oh, my God, I'm going to be late. I pushed open the quilt, turned out of bed, grabbed my clothes in a panic, put on my shoes, rushed into the bathroom in three steps, took out my toothbrush, applied toothpaste, brushed my mouth a few times, pulled off my towel, wiped my face twice, and ran out of the house in a low voice.

Technique 2: Use rhetoric skillfully to publicize personality.

The use of rhetorical devices such as metaphor, parallelism, quotation, duality and personification makes the language expressive and appealing.

① Projection display: What techniques are used to describe the scenery in the following statements? How is the expression effect?

A small red leaf, at the suggestion of the cunning west wind, left the mother branch to play privately. On the way, the wind slipped away quietly and he fell into the stream.

How happy the stream is, she pushes the poor lost little red leaves into a whirlpool and makes him dribble and monotonous; That leaf can't go forward, can't go back, and is about to cry; Water smiled and let go of his hand. He ran away. (personification)

Fate is the cry of Xiang Yu's hero when he committed suicide in Wujiang River. Fate is a series of painful inquiries left by Qu Yuan on the banks of the Miluo River. Fate is Beethoven's tragic symphony when he was deaf in both ears; Fate is a brilliant chapter written by ostrovsky after he lost his sight. (metaphor, parallelism). This passage skillfully uses celebrity examples from different angles to form a sentence with rich meaning and cultural significance, which constitutes the literary talent and appeal of the article. )

Life is Gong Zizhen's persistence in "falling in love is not heartless, but turning into spring mud can better protect flowers". Life is Wen Tianxiang's lofty meaning of "who never dies since ancient times, keeping the heart of Dan as a mirror in history", life is Su Dongpo's detachment and open-mindedness, and life is Du Fu's "where petals are like tears, where lonely birds are lamenting". This passage directly quotes ancient poems to explain the connotation of life and leaves a deep impression on people. Brilliant ancient poetry of Han Dynasty is a treasure in Chinese traditional culture. We have accumulated a lot of ancient poems (or famous sentences) in and out of class, so we should vigorously carry them forward in the exam composition, be good at quoting or using ancient poems, and let the flowers of poems bloom in the composition! )

Language is tasteless, often due to the lack of association, not good at metaphor and description. In fact, the straightforward effect cannot arouse people's association and imagination, and the aesthetic effect must be very poor.

(3) Practice:

Please use your reasonable imagination to write a paragraph with "beauty" as the object, and pay attention to the proper use of rhetoric.

Beauty is a few pieces of residual snow wandering in the cold winter; Beauty is a few clouds walking in the blue sky; Beauty is a touch of sunset jumping on the lake; Beauty is a few birdsongs echoing in the dense forest; Beauty is the green water wrapped around the foot of the green mountain; Beauty is light green wet with light rain in spring; Beauty is the golden field in autumn. The arrangement of these sentences, with the help of metaphor, description and parallelism, concretizes the abstract concept of beauty, which not only points out that beauty is "everywhere" but also shows its "colorful". Very vivid, very infectious. Proper use of some rhetorical devices can not only make the language of the article lively, but also adjust syllables, enhance the beauty of language music, make the language more appealing, and thus enhance the expression effect of the article.

Discuss and clarify: quote and use famous poems and sentences.

Write a set of sentences with "Love" as the topic, quoting ancient poems.

Affection is Zhu Ziqing's father's back, the needle and thread in the hands of Meng Jiao's loving mother, Wang Wei's sigh of "being in a foreign land, I miss my family twice every festive season", Zhang Jiuling's concern about "when the bright moon will be full, now crossing the sea, and at this time, the end of the world * * *", and Su Shi's wish of "wishing people a long time and a thousand miles * * *".

Tip 3: Show your talent in humor.

With the help of humorous language, the writing is vivid, novel and unique, which makes people laugh.

For example: 1. Xiao Ming said to Xiao Li and Xiao Zhang, "I saw a guy wearing a pair of trousers wrapped in urea." Xiao Ming laughed before he finished. "He ... his trouser legs are printed with a net weight of 50 kilograms." Everyone burst out laughing.

2. Because of heredity, she tried to stand on tiptoe during physical examination, and her height was less than1.53m; Because of the mutation, she grew two small tiger teeth, Portugal and Spain; Her signature expression is a smile, and her signature action is "cool" that only boys can do. ...

Third, summary of methods: Today, I summarized the methods to make the language beautiful (blackboard writing:). Of course, there are many ways to enhance the charm of language, so we should pay attention to the appropriate comprehensive application to make the article brilliant. Through the study of this class, many students are ready to try and have writing training: please describe the scene after school on Friday afternoon.

Tip: ① Write three or five sentences; ② Choose an angle and observe carefully; Use one or more methods to make your language as vivid as possible.

As soon as the bell rang, the students rushed out of the classroom like caged birds. Suddenly, the whole teaching building was shaking, as if the ceiling was in danger of being trampled down at any time. At this time, the students have the same goal: to rush to the carport.

The champion of the 100-meter race naturally has an advantage, but other students are not to be outdone and try their best. By this time, everyone is already hungry. If you go home early, you can have dinner early. The slim girl on weekdays has completely become the heroine at this time, and her feet are numb with anger, trying to try faster than men. Because bicycles are crowded and dense, it naturally takes a lot of trouble to get a taxi. What can they do: stare at their cars and pull them out, regardless of other people's cars; Some people even kicked the cars on both sides of the mount to make them stand aside.

What a magnificent sight in the carport! At this time, there is no need to be gentle and carry forward the style. If you wait by, it is very likely that the victim of the "reversing incident" is you. Everyone in the cart family has a common goal: pushing the cart early is victory. Grab the handle of the trolley and leave quickly. So the pushers "just want to fly forward", no matter how scarred their mounts are, the frequency of pedaling is getting faster and faster, and they are eager to return.

Looked up at his watch, * * * and five minutes, the school is over, have to admire the speed of the cart gens. At this point, in the carport, it was quiet, leaving only those fragments. I was really tortured by my old car because I did my homework for a few more minutes in the classroom. When I came to the carport, I was lying in an ugly posture to meet my master.

Advice: Language is the basis of composition training, and the glory of language cannot be achieved overnight.

Suggestion: 1. Read widely and accumulate with your heart. 2. Good at imitation and diligent in writing.

3. Deliberate repeatedly, and consider words. 4. Pay attention to life and punch lines.

Third, homework:

Read the following materials and write as required.

In autumn, the ripe fruit lowers its head. /Not narcissism, but thinking-/How did I become mature? /it's not the wind, I'm afraid it's moldy. /Not the rain, I'm afraid it has withered in the ravine. /not the light, I'm afraid it's already gray. /it's not hot, I'm afraid I'm already haggard and ugly. /Thanks to the wind and rain, it gave me mature bones and muscles. /Thanks to the sunshine, it gave me a mature beauty.

Please write an article on the topic of "thank you". [Note] ① The content written must be within the scope of the topic. The materials cited in the test questions can be used or not. 2 self-determination. 3 styles are optional. 4 topic self-made. ⑤ Not less than 800 words. 6. Please do not copy.

Conclusion: There is no fixed method for writing. Confucius said, "Without words, it is not far away." Used for exam composition, it should be "words without sentences, it is rare to get high marks." Those articles with plain language, boring taste and a thousand people's side make the marking teacher sleepy; And those articles with bright language, flying personality and swaying posture will definitely make teachers fall in love at first sight. But I also want to remind you that literary talent doesn't have to be gorgeous, and simple language can be vivid if used properly. I believe that the next time I revise my composition, I will definitely read excellent works that are both literary and aesthetic. Finally, say a slogan: As long as there is perseverance, language will be beautiful.