A composition describing characters' words and deeds.

Details are the tiny links to depict the characters and unfold the plot. Detail description refers to the detailed and concrete description of a certain feature of a character, scene or scene by the method of "making the finishing point" in order to achieve the description technique of "seeing the spirit in detail". Without details, there can be no works of art. A good detail can play a wonderful role in "knowing the whole leopard at a glance and vividly seeing it at a glance".

If an article is to be written with literary grace, vivid details are essential. It is the lifeline of the article to describe the details as true as possible. Once the details are distorted, the article will lose its appeal.

So, how can we write the details?

1. meticulous. Details are like close-ups in movies. Only "fine" can make all kinds of characters in various postures convey the charm of the characters in a gesture and a smile. This kind of fragment is full of color and meticulous description, or full of affection and emotion, or makes the finishing point and puts forward philosophy ... This kind of text seems short, but it is very "magnetic" and often wins the favor of marking teachers like a shining pearl.

2. Observe things carefully. To make the description vivid, in the process of observing things, we should mobilize our organs and observe things very carefully. Such as the following text: "The crescent moon on the horizon gives off a faint glow and quietly sprinkles on the balcony." In the dim moonlight, the colorful flowers and green leaves all seem dim during the day. At this time, a few blooming epiphyllum are as white as jade, emitting wisps of fragrance and refreshing. Ah! There is another bud in bud. Will it bloom? I felt lucky for a long time. Suddenly, the bud moved ... and finally a small hole opened unconsciously at the tip of the bud. Then, the hole slowly opened, and then the petals gradually spread out one by one. The petals are carved like crystals, and even the veins can be seen clearly; The flower heart is white and tender, and the lace shows a layer of goose yellow. "The author describes the flowers in detail. The whole process of the thick ground, fragrance, color, grain and bud opening makes people feel as if they are in a scene, and the writing is exquisite and vivid.

3. Carefully choose your words. In the description of details, we should choose the right words and try to convey the spirit in one word. Mr. Lu Xun wrote Kong Yiji in Kong Yiji: "I took out four pence from my broken pocket and put it in my hand. When I saw that his hand was covered with mud, it turned out that he came with this hand. " "Touch" means that there is not much money. The concrete action is a portrayal of Kong Yiji's distress, poverty and misery. Convey the author's sympathy for his sadness.

4. Good at "heavy makeup and light makeup"

The description should be appropriate and useful. "Light makeup is always appropriate." Whether you write about scenery or people, you should be "appropriate". The thick is thick, and the light is light; There is a strong feeling and a faint charm. Both have their own strengths and do their best.

5. Clever use of "baking clouds and holding the moon".

Qi Baishi, a master painter, has a picture: a little ladybug stops on a banana leaf splashed with light ink. Not only are the tentacles visible, but even the patterns on the body are clearly discernible. With the ornament of such an elf, the whole picture adds a wonderful life.

A clever writer always tries to break the old rules. The so-called "avoiding the right" means not portraying the characters directly, but comparing and depicting the characters or scenes related to this object from the side, thus making the exercise attractive.

Of course, if you want the characters to have vivid details, then you need a pair of keen eyes and a brain that is good at capturing, carefully observe the people around you and record their subtle words and deeds; Of course, you also need to learn the famous works of writers and absorb the details you need. Over time, you can also write admirable details.

[Teach you a trick]

The golden key to make the characters live.

Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images. Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their freedom and spirit. Writer Li Huai said: "When describing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or scene." As is commonly said, love needs no commitment.

Shaanxi examinee

On TV, a vibrant tropical rain forest, a bird with full wings, like a flame, rises in the bright green ocean around Ran Ran, and its long tail feathers show its male pride all the time. At the same time, a bird with similar appearance but less feathers is lying quietly in a rattan nest, quiet and serene.

What a harmonious scene!

Immediately, the camera suddenly switched, a palm-sized poisonous snake moved in hiding, and the long scarlet letter moved, which was really scary. Its perfect complexion is no different from the color of this tropical plant, and it is quietly swimming towards the bird's nest. Soon, the alert male bird realized the potential crisis, and it suddenly gave a fierce cry. It is too late. Before the female bird in the nest saw the killer, it became a delicious meal in the mouth of the poisonous snake. The viper slowly strolled down from the tree, showing a pleasant look.

I thought the story would end in tragedy, but I was wrong. A black shadow floated in the distance, headed by a male bird, and dozens of angry creatures swooped down with their tender wings open. The viper was stunned by this sudden powerful offensive and fell flat and waited for a while.

After all, it is a generation of hegemons. The poisonous snake regained its senses in a few seconds, regained its posture, curled up, held its neck high, and sprayed evil venom on the birds. As expected, several birds fell from the air. However, the other birds are still flying low, pecking with their powerful beaks, like a gust of wind, pressing the forest, pressing the snake and suffocating it. What are they going to do? How similar they are to Jingwei's reclamation! This scene is really spectacular.

At last, when there were more than a dozen birds left, the viper finally fell down, and then something slipped out of its mouth, ah! It's the female bird just now. The elf who was alive a few minutes ago is now ugly. It just moved, and then it stopped. A flock of birds flew down from the side, as if to comfort their dead companions, while the male was carefully tidying up his rotten feathers with his beak, as if to say something.

"Look, what is that!" My classmates reminded me to look at the lower right corner of the screen. In a flash, I was shocked, I woke up, and I finally understood! Tears rolled down my cheeks silently. A snow-white egg fell asleep under the mother bird's stomach.

Why are men so well-intentioned Why did the female bird's heart beat in the snake for so long? How all these mysteries were suddenly solved! A great husband and father; The same great wife and mother; There are so many great relatives. We don't have to worry about whether the chicken can hatch. At least, it contains the hope that relatives exchanged with blood and life, and the tomorrow created by ardent heart and fearless love, and this eternal love does not need commitment!

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The revised article is obviously more infectious than the original. The author described a series of exciting pictures with vivid brushstrokes and told a tragic story of sacrifice for love. The love between parents and children in the world is an eternal feeling, and so are people and animals. This is the true love of life. The more you love the next generation, the more you can survive in this world. This paper explains the connotation of love, which makes people unconsciously baptized by a kind of soul.

"See the spirit for details."

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Shaanxi examinee

The snow in the sky is quietly colorful, white snow is still floating over the village, and pigeons are flying in the cloudy sky. There is a birch forest at the end of the village. They carved their names on their trees. They vowed to love each other for life.

They live a happy life with their trees there. This winter seems colder than usual, but they feel very warm and romantic.

However, the good times are the easiest to pass. One day, when the war reached home, young people were ready to take up guns and go to the frontier to defend their homes. On the day of parting, the snow was falling slowly and flying in the air. The young man held her hand tightly and stared at her without saying a word. How he wishes time could stop at this moment and let him have a closer look at his sweetheart. I'm afraid that once he leaves, he will never come back. When the train started, the young man suddenly opened the skylight and said to her with all his strength, "Don't worry about me, wait for me in that birch forest." She began to chase the train, hoping to see him again, and the train finally went further and further. I have no strength to chase, and she is still looking at the outstretched hand waving to her outside the window.

The war has already subsided, the village is still peaceful, and pigeons are still flying. The bad news came. That afternoon, my sweetheart died in a distant killing field. Young people disappeared in the birch forest, and the birch forest lost its former glory, which was particularly quiet. It seems that people have forgotten it. After hearing the news, she silently came to the birch forest. She stroked the tree and touched its name affectionately. She still believes that he will come back and meet her in the birch forest.

Now, she is still waiting in the birch forest. She has white hair. She is always at that intersection. When he came back, she said that he was not dead, but lost in the distance. ...

Comments: It is because of the promise that life has produced so many touching stories. With commitment, life has a heavy responsibility. The heroine's persistence in love in this article is like a beautiful butterfly fixed in people's permanent memory.